This posting space is geared towards providing additional analysis of your raw data from either your think-aloud protocol or your writing log. Post a link to your raw data (raw data must be stored in the cloud; Google Drive is one option, but other options are available). Your raw data should include any charts you created and any codes you have developed for organizing your data.
The second task for this discussion board calls you to review the work of two peers and analyze their data. You should analyze the presented data with an eye towards helping the person make claims about how the data can be organized into evidence to support some kind of argument or claim. What kinds of patterns emerge from the data set? Are there particular themes? What could be argued from the set of raw data?
In order to ensure that everyone gets at least two reviews, you should post a brief message indicating you are taking on someone for this review. If someone already has two reviewers, please locate another person to review.
As an analyzing task, you will be graded on your ability to synthesize and extrapolate meaning from a raw set of data. Your posting should make an analytical argument supported by evidence from the raw data set. The best analysis pieces will present sophisticated interpretations of the data sets reviewed.
After the peer review is completed, you should review how your peers interpreted your data set as a tool for potentially revising your process essay.
Here is a link to my transcription with my key:
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DeleteAfter reading through your collected data from your think-aloud protocol, the first thing that I can see from the transcript is that you plan quite a bit while you are and aren't writing. This is definitely one thing that is beneficial when writing a paper and will help you in future papers in college. I also like how you review the prompt occasionally in order to make sure that you are not going off topic while writing the actual content of the paper. The way you have organized your thoughts and ideas throughout the transcript is perfect. The only thing that I can see that you may need to work on is not getting distracted or pausing while you are writing. Even though a pause while writing gives you the opportunity to think, it may also make you lose track of what you are doing. One specific thing that I admire when you write is that you do not frequently go back to correct or change things. One thing that I do is that I will write something and then go back and keep changing it which doesn't help me and in the end slows down my writing process. So by you having the ability to not do this will certainly help you. One pattern that is clear to see is that after every few lines, you will “look back” at what you have just written to ensure that what you have just written down makes sense. You make few errors during your writing process due to the fact that you plan so well. I wouldn't change your writing process in any way. The only thing that I saw is that you should try to get rid of some distractions before you start writing like I stated previously. I know that your valuable skill of planning before and as you are writing will pay off in the future.
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DeleteI have noticed that you plan a good amount before writing your paper. With this skill you better understand what you are going to write, providing a structure for your piece. With a general understanding of what you're going to write, your paper becomes organized and your thoughts begin to flow without hesitation. You spend very little time editing while you write. This implies that your consistent with your work. Things such as spelling and grammar are not your "weakness". The only downfall I could see is that your planning ( depending on how long you plan) could hinder your ability to produce something original because the time spent on planning could limit your time on actual writing. I know for me thoughts essentially pop up when I'm writing my paper. Do thoughts pop up for you? Do you take time to add additional information into your paper? Overall I admire your writing process because it seems very effective. Your planning before writing definitely helps the organization of your paper and settles your thoughts.
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DeleteAndrea,
DeleteIn your protocol I have noticed that you frequently ask questions throughout your drafting process. You ask questions that focus around the content of your topic and try to think of how to phrase words and mentally translate your ideas in your mind onto paper. The questions that appear in your protocol seem to spark ideas in your essay and help bring new elements. I also noticed that as you write your first draft, you edit in the process, you look back at what you originally wrote and try to rephrase or reword something that you didn’t like. In your protocol there were many “silences” and I think that during that period of time more thinking went on and it was a time in order to reflect on your thoughts. In my opinion, the silences seem to be a big part in your writing process that is beneficial, since this means that you carefully think of what you are going to write down in order for your essay to be clear. One last thing that I noticed in your protocol is that there were a lot of distractions that can pose as a detriment to your process because once there was a distraction; you had to read over the previous sentences that you wrote earlier and this could be time consuming. However, I really enjoyed reading your protocol because it showed a clear concise way of your process and it shows me that we have a lot of similarities between our writing processes because I also ask questions and get distracted quite a bit.
Here is a link to my writing log:
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DeleteWhile reviewing your writing log I came across one main pattern that was reoccurring throughout the all of the data, and that was your abundant use of messaging in one form or another (Facebook status, iMessage, E-Mail, or tweets). Although it might not sound like a useful point it can most definitely be used to leverage a number of different arguments. You could also mention the fact that you use messaging as an information tool in your daily life, which could then be further backed by your frequent use of questions in your messages. All of the information provided in the log can be used in many different ways to provide a framing mechanism for a point you wish to make; however you can relate the given data back to your individual writing processes will most likely prove effective. A possible point that you can form from your particular set of data could be something along the lines of: “Writing processes for the general population have evolved over time due to vast technological improvements such as the growing social media monsters of Twitter and Facebook and the huge leaps that phones have made over the years to make the process of messaging more accessible and viable to the user” A point such as this could easily be framed by the data recorded in your writing log.
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Keyla,
DeleteIn your think-aloud protocol you immediately started by stating a thesis and elaborating on it with good points. You also said what you would want to hear if you were in the audience and it is obvious you keep the rhetorical constituents in mind, which is a very good strength. In a paper that seems to be a lot about sympathy and compassion, you do a very good job of keeping the reader in mind. You do a good job stating a thesis and laying down three supporting points out loud and then move onto typing your paper. You also related yourself to the writing prompt and talked about your own experiences which I feel are a good way to think more in depth with your writing. When you start to type, you slow down a bit and find it hard to put your points into words. You thought very hard about your prompt but hit a wall when you stumbled over a sentence and found it a bit hard to write what came next. At the end of your think aloud protocol you said your paper still needed a lot of work (which of course it does you just started), but you laid down strong foundations for a good paper and made a very strong plan that you can work very well with.
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DeleteKeyla,
DeleteIn your protocol I have noticed that you begin by building a good base and understanding for your topic. You start off with understanding all of the parts of your prompt and that seems to work as a benefit toward your process because it helps you spark different ideas on how to address your topic. You definitely walk through the different things that you would like to see on your essay and talk about the prompt and this serves as a form of brainstorming because it helps you focus and gather all of your ideas and it is evident that after you brainstorm, you really narrow down what details you will write about and things that you would leave out. I have noticed that you take the perceptive of the audience and this is a very beneficial part of your essay since it helps you think as the reader and in your protocol it shows that you really want to build a connection between writer and reader so your essay can be interesting and personal. According to your code system I also noticed that you reread your work that you already wrote and this provides an incentive for more ideas to arise and it is an important part of your process. I really enjoyed reading your protocol because I saw that we have many similarities in our writing since I also reread my work in order to spark new ideas and I really found it interesting how you take the perspective of the reader in order to improve your writing and that’s something that I should incorporate in my writing.
Here is the link to my transcription. The coding key is on the third page.
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DeleteAnalysis for Kevyn Shroff’s Data:
DeleteSimilar to the other piece of data that I analyzed, this also was an excellent representation and depiction of the thought process and organization that goes into your particular style of writing. Throughout the piece you demonstrate that distractions are a minute occurrence for you, which drastically improves the quality of your writing. One thing that I like about the way you presented the information was that for your contest essays, you chose a topic that you are not only familiar with but also something that you practice in your every day life. This enables you to have a more thorough knowledge of what you are talking about which makes it easier for you to create an interactive and interpretive presentation of writing. This specific think-aloud protocol demonstrated many of the rhetorical as well as analytical writing styles that we have learned throughout this semester which helped to make it a more thorough finished product.
I really like how in your coding key on the third page you not only categorized the colors but also put them into specific categories for what part of the writing process in which they are involved in. Some other think aloud protocols that I looked at were not nearly as well organized as the way you have presented your information, and the easier that it is to comprehend the data that is in front of the reader, the easier it is for us to analyze if and give advice, which you helped us to do in a significant way. The fact that you are very knowledgeable about the topic in which you are writing about significantly helped the flow and organization of the writing piece. Similar to the other piece that I had to read for the analysis, this was a very well done and organized masterpiece of think-aloud protocol writing.
In conclusion, the more planning, organization, and effort than one puts into their writing the better the overall quality that the writing will be, and in the case of your writing, the extra organization and effort is clearly evident. The color coding and breakdown of the different parts of writing significantly helped to be able to understand what I was reading and this was a very effective and well done job for a think aloud protocol.
After reviewing your think aloud, I noticed that you do a lot of planning of what you are going to write at the beginning of your essay. This made you know exactly what to write which you display because most of your writing process is writing the actual essay. I also noticed that there a few distractions that occurred when you were writing. Distractions happen to everybody and they can sometimes spark ideas. When you were distracted, it was only for a small amount of time and right after you would go right back to writing so it wasn't such of a big deal. My writing was different in this case because when I get distracted it takes quite some time for me to get back on track. A significant pattern I noticed in your writing process was that at the beginning or the middle of writing your essay you would plan while you wrote. This gave you an advantage of not wasting time thinking about what to write and instead writing and thinking at the same time in order to write your paper effectively. This a great skill to have when it comes to writing and you displayed it perfectly here. Overall, I enjoyed your think aloud and thought you did a great job using writing process strategies.
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DeleteAfter reviewing your think aloud, I noticed that most of your writing process is you talking and writing at the same time. This made your paper very organized as you knew exactly what you were going to write about. You also asked yourself questions at the beginning to help you get a better understanding of what you were going to write about and the prompt itself. Also after reading your data, I noticed an interesting pattern in your writing process. The pattern I noticed is that you wrote the body of your essay before the introduction. This at first seemed odd to me, but I later realized that it helped you complete your essay. By writing the body of the essay first, you were able to use the information that you actually wrote to craft an effective introduction instead of just predicting what you will write. This turned out to be an effective writing process that I might try on an essay one day. I also found it interesting when you got distracted and said how much you hate writing essays because I did the exact same thing when writing my essay. Overall, I enjoyed reading your think aloud and I thought you did a great job organizing your thoughts and applying a unique process to write your paper.
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DeleteIn the beginning of your think aloud protocol you inform us that you planned through out the day before actually writing your paper. This gives me insight to how you write your essays. This shows me that you plan a good amount before actually feeling comfortable enough to start your work. This is a great way to organize your thoughts and efficiently get your point across. Although your planning process is very helpful I think your only downfall is viewing your essay as separate pieces rather than one whole flowing piece. The reason I said that is because after you broke down your essay into the commons such as an introduction, body, and conclusion then I realized that your attitude towards the piece became negative. This negativity could essentially affect your paper throughout your writing process. One example could be a rushed paper because you just wanted it over with. I noticed after planning you begin to write aloud. In my experiences writing aloud helps the flow of my ideas and brings new elements to my paper. I think this stage for you encouraged you to bring ideas into your paper and it gave you the flow you needed to bring important highlights in your work. I really enjoyed reading your think aloud protocol and I learned that planning before writing could help the writer, but also can discourage your work.
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DeleteI really liked your think aloud protocol. You went very in depth with your thinking and writing. You talked a lot about your writing process and style; deciding what didn’t make you a good writer. The think aloud protocol was very negative, focusing on mainly your poor writing skills. Even though you may not think you are a good writer, talk about the skills you think you posses. During your paper you went very into every idea that you mentioned. I saw all of your ideas unfold and I found it to be very impressive. Just work on focusing on the positive.
DeleteYour negativity is a great part of your reading process. It helps you to think deeper in what you want to write. Even though it might seem that you are putting yourself down by all these negative comments that you have, it allows you to really think about the topic of the essay. This helps to make your essay better. I also notice that you repeat a lot of things think that you write. This could be a bad think because it might over edit the paper to the point where things don’t make sense anymore. On other hand it could help your paper but I recommend that you do not over edit your paper while writing your paper.
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DeleteAs I read over and analyzed your writing log it was clear that your main form of writing was through texting and the additional social media outlets such as Twitter, Facebook, and Skype. This common theme throughout your writing log can reveal a great deal about how you form your ideas as a writer and can easily be used as leverage tool when making a “point” in your piece.
DeleteUpon further observation I realized that you generally make statements as opposed to asking questions. As this may sound unrelated it could possibly be used to elaborate on how your writing process forms; maybe the use of straightforward statements shows that you are a more direct thinker who is clear and gets straight to the point when writing papers. But then again this might just the way social media has molded your writing process and does not relate to your other types of writings. You could easily tie this to an argument that the new age of texting and social media has changed the way people convey information in their daily lives; then use your personal experiences with texting to frame this point along with physical evidence from your writing log.
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DeleteAfter I finished reading through your transcript from your think-aloud protocol, there was one specific pattern that became clear. Throughout your entire writing process, you constantly ask yourself questions. In the beginning, you made sure that you knew what the prompt was exactly asking and towards the middle and end, you made sure that you didn’t digress from the actual prompt of the paper. This is one thing that we have in common. I also often ask myself questions while writing based on what the prompt is asking to ensure I am not going off topic. You often write in chunks a time due to the amount of times pausing/getting distracted. In my opinion, you should try to get rid of all distractions (cell phone) before writing beginning to write your paper. I sometimes just put my phone completely off and out of sight while I am doing my work so that nothing can disrupt me while I am working. Personally, I believe that you may also want to add a little more planning before you start your paper. I usually plan out my entire paper and then things will begin to flow easier as I move through the process of writing the paper. You do comment on what you are writing quite a bit which is a good thing so you can actually listen to how things sound when you are writing them out. I do think that if you just plan a little more in the beginning of your essay (before you start preferably) ideas will flow easier and you will waste less time trying to think of what to write.
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DeleteAnalysis of Diego Hoganson’s Data:
DeleteWhen given an assignment like this it can cause vast amounts of stress if one is not able to comprehend what is expected of you, but for you, that was not the case at all. This think aloud process was extremely well done, scripted, and perfectly organized to make the reader completely able to understand what was being said while still thoroughly being able to get your point across. An enormous advantage that I noticed in your writing style is that although distractions are very prevalent around you, you were able to limit their impact both time wise and psychologically, in order to finish your writing in a prompt and timely manner. For example when you said, “I wonder what I'm going to have for dinner. Alright, I need to focus on the topic again.” This showed me that you have learned many affective writing strategies that enable you to be efficient and proficient in your writing.
There is not much that I can give you for advice partially because I did not do this form of data collection so I am not particularly familiar with the basic concepts of this style but mainly this was very thoroughly well done and I personally feel it exceeds expectations for what was required of you for this assignment. This may not be a particularly well liked way for one to develop their writing, but the manner in which you conducted this shows me that you know exactly how it is supposed to be done. I personally hope that you have and continue to use this writing strategy for every writing assignment that you have in college because from the looks of it, you are very proficient at this organization style. The color-coding that you used for the entire analysis was very easy to understand which drastically increased the overall quality of the writing piece.
In conclusion, for your think aloud data collection, you did a very well done job of thoroughly explaining all that goes into the style of writing that you use, because the fact is, everyone has a different writing style. This piece was sophisticated yet simple, intrinsic yet complex, and overall very well organized and planned out, which vastly improved the overall quality. This made it very understandable into the style in which you write and easy to break down and comprehend. This piece was, in my opinion, as close to perfect as possible and definitely exceeds expectations for this particular assignment.
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DeleteWhat I notice in your writing is that even though you get distracted while you write your paper, getting distracted is part of your writing process. When you get distracted it helps you to come up with new ideas that you could use in your essay. Also even though it is a distraction you are thinking about what you wrote. What I also notice is that what you called explain what you have wrote would be you really organizing your thoughts. This is just like planning what you are about to write. You might not notice that so if you could do all of that during your planning section of your essay I think it would come out a lot better instead of planning your essay while writing it.
DeleteThe part of your writing process that stands out the most to me is how you talk yourself through your writing. Throughout your whole essay you are thinking what ideas you could get out and how you are going to include them. You brainstorm what points you are going to make and talk out what you are going to include next. This keeps you on track in your essay and is a great part in your writing process. Another part of your writing process is analyzing each point of the prompt along the way. Doing this allows you to hit on every point in the prompt and ensures that you don’t leave anything out. During your writing you think about what background information that you have, and include your prior knowledge to help you develop your essay. I believe that this is a very strong part of your writing process as well because it helps you relate and understand the prompt better. Talking out your ideas, analyzing each point of the prompt, and using your background information are the main parts of your writing process that I discovered throughout your think aloud protocol.
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DeleteJack,
DeleteAfter reviewing your think a loud I noticed quite a few things on how you are going about writing for the process essay and how it might give insight on how you plan for other essays. At least for this essay it did not seem like you were to focused and did not care much about writing this essay. A lot of times you were talking about just getting by and just throwing things out there that you should probably have in your essay when coming up with ideas. However, I noticed that you said how you like to write essays like this and had strong feelings about how the last essay you had to do was a lot more serious where you could not be as open and free but in more of a structure. I feel this essay could be approached with maybe a little better of an attitude, but that might be how you plan. I felt there could have been more focus before you started the protocol to be able to further a general plan. Overall though it is all about what helps you to be able to write your best essay and different things work for different people.
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DeleteBased on your think aloud, I noticed that for the whole twenty minutes you planned out your essay. Most of the things you talked about were ideas for the whole paper, you didn't go into to much details in your planning. From your data you could make two different claims. One being that you take your time when planning your essay, this could be a good and bad thing. You can use the think aloud as proof of this and add more details about your planning process. Another claim can be that during your writing process you don’t plan out the little details, you focus on the bigger topics. You can talk about this as being part of your writing process, and elaborate how this helps you or doesn't when you actually try to put your essay together. These are the two main things I noticed from your think aloud that you could talk about as part of your writing process.
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DeleteFrom reading your think aloud protocol I noticed that you didn’t talk too much about the prompt of the paper. You mostly talked about how the think aloud protocol was different because you have never done something quite like this. It is an understandable thing to do but you should stay more on topic. When ever you paused or got distracted it seemed that your ideas started to unfold. That time that you take not focusing on the topic lets you think and come up with new, possibly more creative ideas. When it came to talking about the prompt you did a successful job talking about your writing process and analyzing it in an effective manner. I would just tell you to stay on topic more and plan better. It seemed as if little planning went into it. Also, try to expand your ideas; go more into depth.
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DeleteAfter reading your think aloud protocol, I decided that one of the potential arguments you could make is that focusing or stressing too much on a writing assignment can negatively affect one’s writing process. You pointed this argument out yourself. If you focused on these parts of you writing process, I believe you could have a strong argument. I noticed another theme in your transcript of your writing process. You often planned aloud the next step of your writing. I also noticed how you would often get distracted when writing. When you did get distracted, you forced yourself on the right track and this could also be used to prove that coming back to the topic can help better your writing. Proof of this argument can be seen in the fact that you often referred back to the given prompt.
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DeleteI noticed that you question yourself a lot. You ask questions about where you are going with your essay and how things will work out later. You do a lot of local planning but your local planning usually ties in with a little global planning because not only do you consider the current moment, but you also look to the future of the essay and ponder the possibilities. There isn't much time wasted and you fix minor issues with spelling and grammar as you go along. You have a good habit of rereading up to the point you are currently at in order to visualize where you are and where you need to go.
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DeleteBrittany,
DeleteYour think aloud protocol was very straight to the point and didn't waste time and immediately answered the questions posed in the essay prompt. You answered all the questions and summed it up that having a job in college is good for students. Patterns I noticed were that you have skill in transitioning to your next paragraph and use facts to support your point. You don't utilize any plans or rules which isn't necessarily a bad thing. Not using plans gives you a lot of freedom in how you shape your essay. You stated that you should think of a good opening sentence, and there is nothing wrong with that but I hope you don't get caught up on that point. Your think aloud protocol showed you are very capable of thinking of and answering questions and supporting your points.
Brittany,
DeleteAfter reviewing your think aloud I noticed that you had a very clear kind of thinking when planning your essay. You had asked essential questions about what a paper usually has to yourself, used comments from your personal view, and even had wrote a lot about things you have read in research. I find this to be a very effective way to approaching how you plan your essay. Not only that but I feel it helps you and gives you something to reference when writing your paper. Overall I feel you did a great job with your think aloud protocol and I think it is very effective in being able to prepare for a sound essay.
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DeleteIn your think aloud I noticed that a couple times that you make comments about not liking what you said but you end up keeping it anyway or saying you will change it later. This is something that you could talk about as part of your writing process. I would elaborate how this affects your writing and explain why you do this as part of your process. Another thing i noticed is for a twenty minute think aloud you didn't have much said, it seems like maybe you could have paused a lot or it took you a while to come up with the different details. But if anything you could mention this as also part of your process and explain why you have not so much data in a certain time period. These are a couple things that you could mention in your essay about your writing process.
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DeleteIn the beginning I like how you go straight in for the topic and process your mind and think of your best ideal topic to use for this essay. But you start stating too many ideas that wouldn’t work. You end up staying a couple thinks that you say later would never work. There are a couple moments where you start to get off topic but it happens to the best of us. But the fact that your kept trying to improve your ideas and expand on them was very effective. I like how you brought up interesting stories too. But I fell like wasn’t a lot written for 20 minutes. If there were points where you paused you could of stated it or if there where any distractions too. But overall its interesting of you gathered your information. Each of us work in different ways.
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DeleteAfter reading your transcript one pattern that really stood out to me was the fact that you made a habit out of reading a lot of the sentences you decided to put on paper. Another pattern that stood out was the fact that you decided to write casually and went back and edited your writing. I think you could’ve shown when you were writing and referring back to the prompt in order to come up with an argument. One argument that you could possibly argue with your transcript is that the writing process is better if uninterrupted by editing and that editing should be saved until the end of the process. I also noticed a lot of planning in your transcript as well. Overall I think you could have used more focus on your topic.
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DeleteAfter reading your think-aloud protocol I noticed that your writing process is very well organized. You start by asking yourself a lot of questions to keep yourself on track and make sure that you are addressing the prompt correctly. I also saw that you researched your topics throughout most of your protocol. I think this is very good because it helps you familiarize yourself with the topic and gives you the information needed to make your point and give many examples. I honestly wouldn’t change anything from your writing process. You ask yourself important questions related to the prompt that help you to develop your points, then you do some research on each to help you better comprehend them, and then you organize them all into different paragraphs. Just by reading this I can tell that your essay was very well put together and that it addressed the prompt very well. I think this is a very efficient way of writing an essay. If you keep using this writing process I’m sure you will always be successful with your writing assignments.
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DeleteAfter reading your think-aloud protocol I noticed that you first start off by putting all of your ideas out on the table. You start pulling apart all the thoughts in your head about the prompt you have to address. You also ask yourself questions to help guide you throughout the planning and the writing. By asking yourself these questions you make some really interesting points about privacy rights. You had many periods of silence where you were thinking of what to write, but they served you in coming up with more questions and things to write about. You never really doubted what you said and you didn't start editing until the end of the protocol. I think that editing what you write towards the end is an advantage because it gives you a chance to write down all your ideas first, which is the most important part of a writing process. I wouldn't change anything about your writing process because you make sure that you are getting all your points across and you ask yourself a lot of questions. With this that I just read, I’m positive that your paper addressed the prompt very effectively.
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DeleteIn your think-aloud protocol you started off by stating your thesis and elaborating with great points. I really like how you thought of your essay in a rhetorical perspective. The way you laid out your main ideas from the beginning was good so that you could state your main points. I also like how you started to ask yourself questions from the beginning so you could help improve you essay even more. Also, those moments where you paused to think so that you could gather your thought was good for elaborating on your topics. Personally, I don’t find anything wrong with it. You managed to stay focused with out many distractions, which is hard for most people to do. I find the way you gather and collected your thought was done is an helpful way.
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Deletejk no i wont
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DeleteI noticed when reviewing your think aloud that you have a very good way of planning your essay. I tend to plan for longer than I should and I end up wasting time, but you are able to ask relevant questions and answer them quickly. You get an idea going and start writing with no time wasted. Once you start writing you spend most of your time writing and commenting as you go along. You got fairly critical of yourself especially when you said "My grammar sucks sometimes" but this didn't stop you from continuing on. According to your graph you wrote aloud more than you wrote silently. You question yourself as you go along as to how you feel about they essay so far and sometimes your questions were about information you were thinking about to write down. Overall I think you have a good system of writing. You are able to plan effectively and write without worrying about a catchy intro or a title like most people do. This is a great way to avoid writer's block since you can always come back to those parts of your essay once you get a few more ideas down.
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ReplyDeleteIn reviewing your think aloud protocol I can infer a couple of things about your writing process. The first thing that became evident to me was that in your planning period you like to figure out how you are going to attack the prompt and gather what background information that you have that you can use as ammunition. Moving into your actual writing period you make many comments which is shown in your pie chart. Some include commenting on your writing and others are more off topic such as the comment that you were getting hungry. Although sometimes you seem to fight this by asking yourself questions to keep you on track. One thing I don’t see you doing that much is talking about what ideas are going to come next. This could be because you are just organizing them in your head, but saying out loud what you are thinking would greatly help your think aloud protocol. The main struggles that seem to occur in your writing are the word restriction and staying focused. Also in your process you like to ensure that everything makes sense and is not too confusing to the reader. This is shown by statements such as “I could move this over here it makes more sense anyways”. The main conclusions I can draw about your writing process is that you plan analyze the prompt before beginning, ensure that your essay makes sense along the way, let your mind wander sometimes during your writing, and critique yourself with comments.